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Balance (교정 : 1)
국적 : Korea, Republic of
모국어 : Korean
구사언어 : English(선택안함)
학습언어 : Chinese (Mandarin)(중급)
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It will have to strike a balance between life and work.
Today I've visited amusement park around the city.(Actually it is the biggest in Korea)
I went there without big expectation af first.
Because what I remember that place, tiredness for too much greed of taking roller coaster rides when I was teen-ager.
So we wanted to went around the rose garden. (Rose fesitival was being held now.)
There was beutiful blossom of rose. It was fantastic.
We thought to take a ride roller coaster ride at a moment.
But we gave up soon because so many elementary school students were there even though today is weekday.
After looking around the garden, we saw people gathering in the middle of the plaza.
We asked to staff what would held in that place. She said that firecracking show and razer show would be held.
I didn't expect not too mucch. But it was awesome actually. The entrance fee is a little bit expensive but I was really satisfied.
Nowdays, I was tied up with work,merrige,dream and goal. So I might got stressed.
Todays outing felt like a gift. I realized again how important balance is.
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Interesting topic Jamie - sounds like you had a fun day! I would write it like this:

It is necessary to strike a balance between life and work.
Today I visited an amusement park around the city. (Actually it is the biggest in Korea)
I went there without high expectations at first, because I just remember getting tired from trying to ride too many roller coasters there when I was a teenager.
So instead, we wanted to go around the rose garden. (A rose festival was being held today.)
There were beautiful rose blossoms. It was fantastic.
We thought to take a ride roller coaster ride at that moment, but we gave up soon because so many elementary school students were there even though today is a weekday.
After looking around the garden, we saw people gathering in the middle of the plaza.
We asked the staff what kind of event would be held in that place. She said that a fireworks and laser show would be held.
I didn't expect too much, but it was actually awesome. The entrance fee was a little bit expensive but I was really satisfied.
Nowadays, I've been tied up with work, marriage,and my dreams and goals, So I've been stressed.
Todays outing felt like a gift. I realized again how important balance is.

Keep it up!
날짜 : 2012-05-20 01:00:58
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