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What is the most important thing to the company?
Benefit? immortalness? man?
Nowdays, all the big company focus on the benefit , pretending they don't.
If I were a CEO of a company, what would I emphasize?
People say survived person is the strong.
However, is that right to survive in shameful way?
What is right for a human.
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Interesting topic Jamie! I would write it like this:

What is the most important thing to a company?
Profit? Sustainability? People?*
Nowadays, all big companies focus on profits while pretending that they don't.
If I were the CEO of a company, what would I emphasize?
People say only the strong survive.**
However, is it right to survive in a shameful way?
What is right for humans?

* = I guessed a little what you meant. Profit and Sustainability are common business terms, and I think they are similar to the words you used.

**= "Only the strong survive" is a well-known old English expression. I thought it matched your meaning closely in this sentence.
날짜 : 2012-05-04 10:04:54
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